You made up the Velveteen rabbit...? :D jk, I love the focus on imagery in this piece. Excellent. It is powerful and unique.

Nice. This is good stuff. i am not entirely sure what you are describing, but it was the feel of what you described, not the image itself, that made this work. Did that make any sense? I hope so. At any rate, i loved it.

I like this poem... I like the words you chose, but more importantly the way you put them together.

I'm not really sure what this poem is about, but whatever it is, I like the way its conveyed.

The only complaints are a few misspellings.

Good job and keep writing!

Wtf? *hates that none of your poems make sense*

I liked this because you picked really nice words and strung them together in a very lovely way. There were a few places where the word choice wasn't so great ("legs wrapped around drain pipes draining color from our cheeks" the repetition of the word "drain" throws it a little) but overall the vocabulary here is great. However, the lines seemed to have a little difficulty flowing well in some places. Some of the lines went nicely together, but other's just stuck out in an awkward way because they just didn't fit, you know what I mean? I'm not very good at critique, I'm sorry. But the point is, this is a pretty good piece.