absolutely amazing! i totally love it! loads of suspense in this and the different perspectives r good. the ending was great too. very interesting so far. u just HAVE to update soon! looking forward 2 reading the next chp, well done:-) ~mez~

Genius. I loved it from start to the end of this chapter, and now I'm onward to read the next chapter. I can only hope it's as good as this one. You are very talented, how long have you been writing? And, also, are these feelings you write about your own feelings, or did you make them up for your character? I'm interested, onward I read.

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Uh-oh. Damn cliff hangers... I hate 'em wit a pashion, I's do.

FINISH IT! AND AH'VE GOT MAGGIE AND AH'M NOT 'FRAID TO USE 'ER! uh-mm... ah well...

wow! u just HAVE to update this. the 2nd chapter is better than the first one, 2behonest. love the different perspectives and the plot is developing awesomly. love the bit where Kass says 'mommy named me'. wanna really know what happens next so UPDATE!

not a bad start. i like it so far and i wanna know what happend to him to make him this way. and of course what was the phone call about. a bit confusing when Maria comes in but its a great beginning. there's tons of suspense and the plot sounds good. update soon!

hee hee...

I love that line, " 'But I'm your dad.' 'Mommy named me.' " YAYA! SO ... CUTE!

Heumr... anyhoo - i like that kid. He's frickin' awesome!!

Good start, but I don't understand what's happening in the last paragraph. Pencil? Mad man? ?