Wow...after reading Manitou Island, this really sets off your ability to write in different styles with a range of characters. I love your dialogue and character development. The speaking flowed well, and your narration of the reactions rounded out the scenes. This is a thought provoking plot that moves along without being bogged down by too many descriptions or excessive talking. And I think you don't need the comment in your author's note about your "meaningful" ending is unecessary. You lay out the story and the motivations very clearly, and anyone who doesn't get it, isn't going to. You've done your job as a writer, and you have to have faith your readers will get it...and if they don't, then in this case that's not your fault. Good story, and I look forward to reading more of your work.

Extremely well done,If only people could write more like you,It was long, you might wanna consider splitting the page into Chapters, but whatever works... Im not complaining, agian well done~redroplets