i like it...but ouch, i hate it when stuff like that happens to me..."i swear i didn't do it!" "then who else could it have been!?" "Not me!!"

yeah, so...yeah.

Fasinating, it would be a perfect ending to a long sad romance story.Pretty well written!

Oh, beautiful, beautiful.The only criticism i have would be of the summary =P I don't think it does this justice. Is it your major?

Oh my gosh.. That was absolutlely Incredible... It out of this world, it was so real, Names would only ruin it, it's really very well written i love it... UPDATE PRINCESS TOURNAMENT... your killing me here

omg, no, never ever name characters for a story like this. That gives them a life, and makes them real. This story is perfect the way that it is, i mean, absolutely perfect. It's completely emotional, if somewhat predictable, and you wrote it perfectly. It's just...it seems like you were trying to rush through it. When writing a story like this, you need vague scenes and yet intense detail, to keep it mysterious. That's why you don't need names. Otherwise, you wrote it absolutely perfectly. What grade ddi you get? you said that you wrote it for school, if i'm not mistaken... Man, you gave me awesome ideas for my next short story assignment, thanks!Cya

HOLY CRAP! that was so god!*wipes tear*write more stories .. quick!!!-caroline

Beautiful short story.

Wow, lol, I seriously can't believe that was all only for English class (straight A's, here you come ;) )

Anyways, the emotions were clear and definite which I liked, nice imagery as well.

As far as the name thing, well, it might serve some good but I like the idea of the 'prince' and 'princess'..it almost serves as a constant reminder of the tragedy of it all. Damn it, he's so brave. Ahh, what we do for love *wipes tear* Anyways, right, if you use names maybe mention them in the middle just to switch up the terms but for the most part I'd use their royal titles.

Well, I hope that helped, keep up the great work and thank you for the lovely read :)

-B. Blum

Oh My God, That was Amazing! that was so good i was crying my eyes out by the end of it! you are such a good writer, and i hope you update ur Princess tournament story soon! Lolz Just kidding, only if you want to. Anywways, again that was beautiful, keep it up...

oh dear. feels like its missing something

Oh no! Ming ur stori is heepz gud! Wow! Humph i wish i could write lyk u mi major irs realli bad... and lame... wah! Its so gud! newaiz... it was realli gud not taht itll make much difference now since tis due tomro... but newaiz... realli gud, realli emotional and itneresting... v. captivating! HEEPZ GUD!

~elena! :D:Dp.s. did i mention it was realli gud??

"is it good?" are you insane, girl? that was kickass smoking damn good. incredibly well written, especially the emotional parts wow... keep this up really.. its amazing and i cant wait to see what happens - roni

What the hell? I just got an email saying you updated this story twice, but when I clicked on the link it said the chapter didnt exist...whats going on? I was all excited and now I'm really **. Help!~Sita

Hehe I liked this lots... hmm makes me seem kind of sadistic, doesn't it? But it's true. The whole time he was trying to gain her respect and love for him and he only accomplished that by sacrificing himself =( Poor thing... dead! But at least he died with this sende of peace =( Leave it the same, don't do anything to it! It's perfect missy! I read the other version before but could review because of my exams... I mean I've been reviewing stuff but then had to run off the computer from my parents' accusing gazes. Evil! Hmm what else... The ending was the best part, I mean the description in it.

The Prince was dead, his lifeless body swinging gently from side to side.

Wow. I'm thinking you and Linda have to do this for some school assignment. They're both done extremely well. Hope you guys get an awesome grade on it. Adios muchacha,

~Bubblegum

I thought this was excellent. It reminds me a lot of the short story "The Lady, or the Tiger?" By Frank R. Stockton. Maybe if you read that, you could get some insperation to make some additions, although I do not think you need any. :) http://w.pagebypagebooks.com/Frank_R_Stockton/The_Lady_or_the_Tiger/The_Lady_or_the_Tiger_p1.html You should be able to see the story at that link. Hope it helps.

i just kinda wish that you had let him live and then turned it into a longer story

she couldv'e like thrown a dagger and cut the rope or something

oh i dont know

i just like happy endings

but for what it is ( a sad story with an unhappy ending, i think) it was good

um...good emotions, dont name the characters the stories not long enough, no grammer probs, and suggestions...yes one

get back to princess tournament!