Ever thought of turning this into a novel? I definately enjoyed reading it. Its pretty lengthy, but that didn't discourage me really.. I liked it a lot.. its good writing.. Write on!

--Meme

P.S: Yeah.. Reverse psychology is weird.. It works though.. I never thought it would, but you proved me wrong i guess! :P

Damn you! You left me speachless again! I don't know what to say now... I loved it and I related yet again to the feelings implied. The reverse phsycology worked by the way... i wasn't going to read it but I gave into the urge and I was not dissapointed. Another for the favs... ~Paige

I LOVE IT!

hypo/cancer boy

Good poem, sad though :(

Like the doors thing :)

Interesting, its hard to tell if you wrote this because of experience, or you came up with this out of imagination...either way, it was beautiful

Jaded,SwimmerGirl

beautiful and believeable.

you need to work on line length - in almost everything i've ever read by you, the lines are short and stunted. it may not be appropriate for your writing style, but try to branch out a little and adopt new styles. don't be scared to try new things.

it may hurt a little to modify your writing, but the star-studded reviews you'll get will certainly help assuage the pain. ^.~

keep writing, hun, your poems make my head spin. i could really relate to this one, i think it's one of your best pieces. very pretty.

~CM

excellent poem! shows the insecurity of a person but in my opinion people should just take the risk cuz if u don't then u'll never get anywhere. always fearful and apprehensive. wonderful poem. has a natural flow and great scene. well done!

Aawoh this poem'sso bittersweet!

I think it's one of your best, Sheep-Dog. Really, it is...

Quite good but rather long. I give it an above avrage rating (6 out of 10).

Other then the fact of it's length I would say it seeming a bit like pros would be its biggest misgiving.

Though it clearly explained the experience and had me mismurised at the end the middle took alot of patenice to endure and if i was reading simply out of pleasure i might have stoped somewhere around half way or took one look at the lenght and decided not to read.

Good work and keep on writing!