Wow, I have to say I like this peom. My favorite part is the third stanza. Keep up the good Write.

hm... its kind of a broad poem which can be good because the reader can then think about what it means to them, but if its too broad no one knows what it means to you... just for future reference. good job, you are a talented writer.

P.S. when the world turned black it was because riley hit the window which was because charlie hit her. hope that clears things up. thanx for the review.

very raw and undecorated. cool. have you read the outsider? i had to read it for english, its about this guy who's condemned to death for shooting someone who attacked him, and in the trial they talk mostly about how he didn't cry at his mother's funeral. he was an indifferent guy and had a girlfriend called Marie. this poem reminds me of it for some reason S

and he didn't love marie either!

like the little rhyming and the matter of factness.

i like this one a lot, i like how it's so vague and leaves it up to you to think about what felly has done. very nice :)

It is intriguing. I shall go to ponder.

I take it that was written fir a specific person/purpose... Because I understood a gist, but not nearly enough to go "Ah."

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But it was structured pretty well, and it was nice.

painful, emo, terrific. to put it in three words. -wallflower.

Wow ! another fantastic one! You have major talent! I love this! :):)

its odd 'cause you cant tell waht its about, but thats cool at the same time

a twist

it's almost apathetic in the way it is so straightforward, but yet it isn't

vague huh?

blunt, that's the word

glorious