|Reviews for collapse,|
| FrozenKiwi 1/8/06 . chapter 1
Your poems creep me right the hell out. Good job!
| vonlan 8/17/05 . chapter 1
o... i have no clue what to say to this, but this is a fairly easy to understand poem if you're speaking of an event.
i can't judge an event, but what you wrote seems easily flowed..
| citrus scented 8/12/05 . chapter 1
christ, this is just...wicked. taut and bitter to read, wonderfully written.
| AntiPleasure 7/7/05 . chapter 1
I like your styles. Most are quick to the point when telling a story and the images are painfully portrayed. Nicely done.
| Phat Models 7/4/05 . chapter 1
sure how I could describe this...it was definately different...but I liked it.
| lackluster 7/2/05 . chapter 1
i'm amazed with this poem. its definetly odd but it works. nicely done
| AboveTheSalt 6/27/05 . chapter 1
ahh. this is beautiful. very unique subject choice and stanzas. i love the topic; oh so relate-able & captivating. lovely word choices, too. great poem.
| kalmia raphael 6/26/05 . chapter 1
kind of surreal and sunglazed. a lifeguard that was a few minutes too late to save some kids or the waves were too strong so they killed him. funny that something so tragic can be discerned from a sandwich. very lyrical and pretty, ironically so. makes me think of people's old vacation photos.
| Nobody-n-Particular 6/23/05 . chapter 1
What a prevalent image you write of.
| and flowers 6/22/05 . chapter 1
hm. i think that i like it a lot
| linaeve 6/22/05 . chapter 1
ugh. what terrible timing, truly.
| negligible fictional force 6/21/05 . chapter 1
god, i just love the concept so much. -wallflower.
| miyoo 6/21/05 . chapter 1
wow you are good _
| always gats b y 6/20/05 . chapter 1
Ahh, I'm in love with this one! Nicely written. I loved the ending.
| Kristina 6/20/05 . chapter 1
Wow Claire! This is fantastic! Beautifully written!