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| Tatsu, the Blade Star 2005-08-10 ch 1,   | Hmm, kinda nice to see someone play the voice of reason for a change. Most of the suicide themed poems on this site are all dark and I-hate-the-world-ish. Nicely done. |
| secret thoughts revealed 2005-08-05 ch 1, | if your friend has any sense at all this will bring them around and show them they have at least one thing to live for hope it works |
| Anna178 2005-07-26 ch 1, | This is really amazing, and thanks for your review. Yea, I've had a similar experience, and can really relate to this. Life is too important to throw away. I'm sure everything will turn out alright. And that your friend really does realize how much you care. ANNA |
| lordelfy 2005-07-06 ch 1, | really good |
| War-and-Peace 2005-06-30 ch 1, | This was powerful...I've felt frustrated towards a friend just like that..great job =) |
| alligater20 2005-06-28 ch 1, | I am being blown away by your work! Bravo! I love it! This reminds me of someone I know and love very very much. They sometimes talk about how they want to die and it makes me so sad, yet I only want them to be happy. I love this so much! =) |
| SmilieDuck 2005-06-26 ch 1, | SAD! Descriptive, and I could tell what you were feeling. Why do some kids think that they don't matter in the world? If he was really that dear to you, wouldn't he be able to tell?? Anyway, it was a fitting poem of grief.However, the last stanza, though good, was blunt (in a way) and the last line seems to stand by itself, repeating, I don't know if that's what you meant, but I suppose it's a good way to end the poem. Or maybe end it (or is this too sappy?) like "and I will miss you forever." I don't know. whatever. I'll work on more stuff, but patience. R&R is good! wow. :) |
| astral boy 2005-06-26 ch 1, | i especially like the last few lines of this. i dont really know what to say, but i like thr honesty in your writing. you say it helps to heal you, and i think it helps me understand your feelings. in that sense, you've nailed it for me. thank you for reviewing me, as well. |
| Sorrowful Dreams 2005-06-25 ch 1, | this is touching. I hope everything turns out good for you. heartfelt and emotional. I know the feeling. ~Sorrow~ |
| i-rite-gud 2005-06-23 ch 1, | That is such a sad poem... |
| NewlyBorn 2005-06-22 ch 1, | this is a great poem, very powerful...great job with the words, and i hope ur friend didnt murder ur heart! and ur right, true friends dont come very often...anyways, great job and keep writing |
| misery re 2005-06-21 ch 1, | The person you wrote this too is very lucky to have someone care so much. Sounds full of love and compassion. Very nice. |
| summerbee 2005-06-20 ch 1, | I hope you (or someone else) can talk sense into your friend, because I know from experience that losing someone dear to you is one of the worst things you can go through. Just remember I'm always here if you want to talk, even though I don't really know you, you can email me if you want. Excellent poem. |
| Sacred-Phoenix-Nephthys 2005-06-20 ch 1, | I no wot ur going through and it hurts a lot 2 see sum1 u love contemplate this kind of thing, but we gotta stay strong and give em all the suport, they will come through eventually. I love this, keep it up ^-^ |
| Kutsu 2005-06-20 ch 1, | Aww...I have a lot of friends like that. They tend to ** me off, so I end smacking some sense into them, damn bastards don't get away from me that easily! I really liked how you put your poem together, the fact that it doesn't rhyme adds to the sincerity, of it. ^__^ |