A very unique take on the subject. i enjoyed reading it.

That was different but a cool different.

LOL! This was very well written, almost reminded me of the comic 'Sandman' only it made me chuckle. I really liked this! Well done, lass!

Wow, interesting story. I love the original plot and intriguing way of looking at things. Very cool. Loved your descriptions too.

For your characters try to give them more feeling and personalities.

Other than that awesome job.

firstly, for such a short piece, i say that i definitely enjoyed it. What a quirkly little stab at the end of the world. characters weren't as well drawn out as i'd like [being a follower of all things World Endy], but perfect for the brevity. could possibly be extended? take that as you will.

more imagery and description might capture the scene a bit more, and maybe a little bit of where/when. Are they in pandora's box or in a nifty little townhome in Pasadena, CA? who knows? ah, i get it now...that's the point. no one knows.

good work. more description would be good and maybe an extention. for us fans. *thumbs up*