Nicely written and simply inspiring. I love the play of emotions and the beauty within. Hats off to you!

~~Trinity

HI! BY! hehe..i won...:P so.. u've been writing poems now eh...who inspired u to do poems? *looks around*.lol.. about this poem... i like the way u explain ur feelings..as if i am connecting with u..which is really good. Just one thing.. this poem have to flow more smoothly.. wat i mean is like when i read from the beginning until the end, sometimes it is kinda hard to read every line cuz i pause every single time. try putting it up into verses.. makes it easier to understand. "Hidden beneath the layers of lies" i love this sentence ^^. kk... that's all i can comment for now. keep up the gud work aite oka-chan!

wow. I like it. oddly, it reminded me of something I wrote myself, but mine ends differently (curious? it's called "lifeline"). in any case, this is simple but eloquently put, and also sweet. well done.

Incredible, it is inspiring and one poem to be placed in awe. So many can relate, challenges yet there will be help- ^_^ This poem is beautiful!

If chance comes back review some of my poems, please.