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| Akhenaten 2005-06-23 ch 1,  | abusesad! I hope your friend sees this, they would have to be very proud to have such a brilliant piece of work about them-Akhenaten |
| nothing but treble 2005-06-19 ch 1, | abusei can tell it was written with much amor, but you fell victim to the ever popular disease of sacrificing better word choice for sake of rhyme. which, it turn, makes it sound a little cheesy with phrases like "i miss you so" and "always had each other", which are a little over-used in the world of prose. even so, the message is sweet and lines such as "this world is so vast" and "dared call me brother" saved it somewhat. with a few revisions it would be really great. ciao, reggie |
| Princess-anna57 2005-06-19 ch 1, | abuseWow! What a well written poem. I completely enjoyed this. Write on! ~Anna~ |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-06-19 ch 1, | abuseOh, so sadly put. I can relate to this. I haven't seen my best friend for four years. Seems so much longer... |