It's fantastic! I bet, as a song this would be one of my favourite ones. I love what you expressed here - it's kinda twisted and yet strangely fascinating.

*has been singing it under her breath*Yeah, the first time I sung it was pretty good, but then I went to sing it again and it appears I ave lost the tune and now it almost sounds like a Flogging Molly song (oh, the irony, that as I flog your lyrics, it would sound like a song form that band). And ... 'nuff said.*has just reread a few of her own poems and realizes how much they suck*Yayyayayayaya ... i

Yo, Moley-os. Just wanted to say that was very good. V. v. good. *smile*

This is quite nice. Great rhythm, and searing lines.