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| addie pray 2005-08-05 ch 1,  | abuseBeautiful imagery. I usually like to see more complex words in haiku,(I don't know if that contradicts what a haiku is supposed to be) but this was lovely in all it's simplicity. I think this would be more complete if you described the butterfly, the wind, the wings -- basically the enviroment in a more abstract preceding haiku (or haikus), then ended it with this. Eh. Basically, I just like the idea and imagery and would love to see more. I'm a greedy little reader. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-06-20 ch 1, | abuseLovely focus on a moment. |