Calm and intricate and disturbing.Just the right length, too. It's like watching a videotape of a few minutes in her life...only more telling.

That was a very short, but very poignant scene, yet it accomplished, I believe, what was intended. I like your level of focus. The image with the ying yang lighter and the violets was extremely vivid.

All I can say is: Karma is a real **!

It's a pretty good flash fic, though I wish I knew better what the character was thinking as she hurt herself. But I guess you prefer us reading her actions rather than her thoughts.

Reading this brought back memories. Just 7 months ago, I was cutting my arms because I couldn't take my parents' abuse anymore. Luckily, a teacher noticed how I was deteriorating and made the right phone calls, so I'm doing much better now.

If you're inclined to read more fiction about mental illness, I recommend you check out my short story "You Know What You Must Do".

When checking my email this morning, noticing that I had gotten a review for a story I submitted months ago made me quite embarrassed... However, thank you for pointing out that I was wrong to leave my story hanging. I am extremely sorry, but I have been working on other stories and poems for this site and FanFiction. I will update my story ASAP, because there is a lot more in store for my friend and I...(laughs maniacally).

As for your story here... I do think MFlames has a point, it doesn't seem much different than some of the others I've seen. BUT! That does not give you the right to abandon it completely! I wish to see where this story goes... So, I update, you update, everybody's happy. Savvy? Write On!

What powerful play on emotions and depths of the mind. You weave many differents states of the mind in and out of symbolic imagery.

This piece has no redeeming qualities. Not to say there's anything wrong with it, there's just nothing 'right' about it. To this story, I give a small shrug and move on.