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| breakdown in the waiting ro... 2005-08-22 ch 1, | abusePlease tell me you know, seeing the dozens that agrees with me, that this is fantastic. Very angry and adolescent and punk rock. Brilliant lines (especially the line about your psychology and hissy fits...razor nicks); awesome rhythm. I'd kick ** to play this as a song. ;) -jess |
| Manuel Fajar 2005-07-11 ch 1, | abuseEach flower variegated on its own, With patterns imbued deeply separate, Soul's tesselations fall out differently, But each one sacred in its mystery, Yet there are gardens that permit none such, Where only repetition can exist, There variety is considered sin, Without consideration for life's core, A heart that accepts all and lives in love. |
| Alisha Marie 2005-07-07 ch 1, | abuseGreat job on this! I really likedit! |
| Hercule 2005-07-02 ch 1, anon. | abusei love how you are declarative in a (very) lyrical way; it may not be poetry, but it certainly is the most beautiful prose-poem/proclamation/song/epitaph/rant/argument/cry/plea/petition/prescence I have ever felt, heard, seen, or read in the past 2-month. |
| fik 2005-07-02 ch 1, anon. | abusei like! (-has nothing intellectual to add.) |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-01 ch 1, | abuseLovely flow and rhythm. |
| Sagaciouspnay 2005-06-29 ch 1, | abuseOh! I like this very much. It shows a rebellion that I can compare to. Excellent job! Keep writing! |
| dollface and her cancer 2005-06-29 ch 1, | abuseIf there were words to praise this, I would use them. As it is, I am speechless, and in awe of both wallflower and kismet. Praise to you both. |
| WiltingBlackRose 2005-06-27 ch 1, | abuseThat is so good! I love it. |
| Rozlin 2005-06-27 ch 1, | abuseoh! Kudos! ilike this. it picked my mood back up, which i needed after someone sortof misunderstood one of my poems (Hello) it's not my best but i had to get it out there. come check out my work please. I'm off to read more of yours. |
| kalmia raphael 2005-06-26 ch 1, | abuselike it a lot. last stanza kind of awkward, but the stanze before last i absolutely *loved*. also the part where there are long lines suddenly interrupted by 'get. a. life.' and fullstops. like the refrain too. the mention of 'daddy' makes me think the person is quite young, a child or preteen, and that makes me love the poem even more, if this was a child having to go to a psych. i like psych stuff. you're 14? you seem older. |
| KonekOniko 2005-06-26 ch 1, | abuseTwisted with a smile. Shrinks really don't do their jobs, friends really know how to make your feel better, even if they lack in experience and training; it's really better that way. It really does have a music-y flow to it. I love the repetition of this poem, pure genius! ~Sumi-chan; What you call love, I call pain. |
| BlueJayWalking 2005-06-26 ch 1, | abuseHey fellow Singaporean!^^ Wow! Brilliant work - you're one brilliant writer. |
| and flowers 2005-06-23 ch 1, | abusewhoa |
| linty 2005-06-22 ch 1, anon. | abusehey. there.its perfectly fine this poem.you have a slightly different style now .nice nice. |