description is excellent

_ Nice!

LOVED the last line!

I bet you had fun doing the descriptions! You're so good at them! _

oh, that's gorgeous. so soft and heartwarming. new outlook on beggers; who many think of as disguisting and almost scary... why i don't this is beautiful. I think you should be proud of the descriptions; they are beautiful

apt, creative and strong in emotionsbrilliant )

The contrast was awesome and so were the descriptions. Interesting piece of work, it's a perspective that not many people ponder. awesome work thumbs up

In so few words you made me wish I was more like the beggar! His attitude is a wonderful thing and obviousely his world is a much better one then the majority of ours! Very nice read, your way with words is very beautiful :) 9/10

The imagery and your subtext in the words you write is what gives your poems edge. Your words are definately not shallow and are not to be looked at one way- NICE work

I love this! It's so sweet. When I got to the part in italics, I didn't understand, but I kept reading and figured it out. I love the last three lines. For me, the last lines are what brings the story together and wrap it up, and you did a beautiful job of both. I love the imagery in the line, "Laughing as stars careened by". This is excellent, and post more stuff here on FP!

wow. . . an interesting take- well done.

Beautifully written. The descriptions are very realistic, and I love how you made it so personal. Well done! Simply brilliant!

absolutely beautiful. i adore the contrast between his imaginings and reality, like a change from a technicolor movie to a black and white film noir. very real and very personal. the reader really grows a sense of compassion for him & his troubles. the last stanza really pulls it together, though, because he is content in his own oblivious world. the fact that he's blind definitely adds something to it - couldn't the rest of the happy people be just as naive and sightless? or is that just my own folly? in any event, this is a very beautiful poem, although i personally would not have included the hyphens between stanzas and the unnecessary "And"s on their own stanzas. the italics symbolize the change in view; the word And makes it redundant and annoying. lovely read.

-salt.

I love the way you described the homeless person as being me If I misinterpreted that writing,I really like it. :)