this is a lovely seeming metaphor. love the cotton candy cobwebs line. this is a great piece.

i dont much like rhyme schemes, but you pulled it off pretty well.good job

your diction was incredible. but the first rhyme seemed a bit forced.

great write

I really enjoy your imagery and flow to this one, slightly dark but that is a good thing.

Vivid imagery that expresses the feelings of the poem. Excellent. I love the last two lines, nice way to wrap up the poem. Fantastic job!

~ScareCrow

Wow. Your poetry is beautiful!

I love this poem! It is so marvelous! Great work. I love the way you ended it as well.

Wonderful. The feelings and descriptions in this are just like how I feel. Poeple can relate to this very well.

Keep it up.

Very powerful and presented in such a unique and beautiful fashion. Keep up the excellent writings!

Wow, I love the imagery. So nice.

interesting. when i read the veryregular rhyme scheme (congratulations on that) everything seemed very... well, regular, like it was typical subject matter, but then you suprised with some very new and unexpected metaphors (i particularly liked cotton candy cobwebs and the damned soul hanging over the fire) all in all, lovely, haunting work

beautiful poem! truly amazing, i mean, it is so relatable, and powerful! great job!

beautiful. wow. excellent words.

SP

Great poem, it's really well written and I love the imagery. Nice emotions, they come through well.

wonderful work, beautiful and deeply moving and powerful.

~* noelle