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| Artemisfire 2005-06-23 ch 1,  | abuseIts a good idea. I like the whole dog thing. The probelm is though that many people don't get very far with Dogs as main characters without it being a childrens book. Good idea though |
| Eyetk 2005-06-21 ch 1, | abuseHmm...a very interesting story, though it seems to be a bit more sci-fi then fantasy.. My biggest CC would be to break up your paragraphs. Long chuncks of text are rather hard to read off of a computer screen without getting lost along the way. My second and third CCs are already written out in great detail at the links below: http://w.fictionpress.com/read.php?storyid=1942775&chapter=3 http://w.fictionpress.com/read.php?storyid=1942775&chapter=4 |