totally empathy here. i love the way you wrote this visually. the constant running and being followed is well portrayed. i love it.

-azzalli

So ironic, since it's meant to be the will to live. But you captured the whole helpless feeling so well! I loved it. Nice one!

Your free verse is amazing and it all flows together smoothly. Great job onthat. In general, this was just really well written and you get the feelings of urgency across very clearly. Keep up the good work. (And I love your Pen name)

Dream Forever

Thats so good...i wish i could write like u. U should of been showin ur talent a long time ago!

Great chica keep it up! I need some competition...playin playin

Very powerful. Meaningful and creative. It expresses many feelings. Keep it up.

-Lyn-