Love it. I like the flourescent lights and reaching out and feeling things that feel so good to be felt and tasting things from far away. It all flows together so well.

Hell perfected & heaven vanquished...that pretty much describes this. The way you describe things is amazing. I love it. I'm trying to pick out favourite lines but it's all so phantasmic.

magical. what a life, an illusion. love your words. from the first sentence till the last, it's purely wonderful.

-salt.

incredible

Wow! This is totally AMAZING! Very vivid and so alive with feeling!

Lovely poem! Great imagery! Wonderful structure. Reminds me of E.E. Cummings. (Which is a very good thing, in my opinion.) It's good to challenge the rules of grammar and mechanics. :) Great poem.

I am drunk now, these words have such effects... :) Lovely

wonderful, wonderful imagery! I have to say the begining is quite humorous and the ending is quite fitting to it.

* noelle

Finally!This was the first thing worthwhile I've read on this site. [I'm a newbie here, but definitely not a newbie to poetry.]Everything else was lacking wordplay and poetic devices altogether; this poem has a feel of "knowing what the rules are then breaking them."At first I wasn't sure what I felt about you not typing "and" out, but it fits with the style pretty well. I'm going to check your other stuff out, you seem worth the while.

lovely, nearly-painfully exquisite imagery. interesting unity, with the sake/champagne/wine. brilliantly done.

Beautifully written, as always. I adore the ending.

you make me fall in love with these writings of yours! wow-wow-wow! mesmerizing...

great imagery!

Beautiful prose, like poetry in it's simplist form. This is great writing, keep it up...