the words with periods after each got exactly the desired effect-- excellent.

RIGHT ON... breath taking and REAL. Captivates the ignorance some people possess, perfectly. ^.^

~Shavo

Wow. Inner wars over outter wars. Morals versus pride in orders. This was a wonderful protrayal of that mental struggle.

very compelling. loved it. never ever stop writing!-gatito

Sounds like a soldier fighting within himself... morals, or orders... I may not say so directly, but your poems are great.

Wow! This is just amazing. The pain in this poem is all most freighting to me. I dunno why. I think it's just 'cause I could really feel it in my gut. Wonderfully written.

WOW. I dunno, this one just sort of hit me from all angles and now I'm speechless... That means it's going on my favorites list.

P.S. You are a BRILLIANT writer. I love the honesty in you.

this gave me goosebumps just reading this. It is wrong to have a war like this...great work!

~Sorrow~

i love the format... extremely powerful poem with an amazing message... i love that ending too.. great job... i might separate it into stanzas though

Wonderfully deep. I like it. Good vocabulary, except the X parts are a little odd, but then who minds oddities? Nice and morbid, well done.

I like how you call it the Oil Wars. I never thought of it like that (though I do know that it's about the oil. . . always about the oil) And I love the ending.

XD I found this insanely funny! the poem is amazingly well conveyed and beautifully done. though the ending just added to the touch. nicely done. suberbly written and amazingly well detailed.

~* noelle

Nyah, I like teh poem *_*. Espically the boy, the 'Young (13)'. So much better then mine XP. And I like the 2nd last stanze, too!

Enough of meh rambling XP. Byes!

Doki doki,Ali

I like the way you keep going back and forht about right and wrong through very subtle words. I like the line "Lies of the most vicious kind." Great Job.