I know this is long, but just read it, it does aply to you down there.

So it's been awhile, a long while, since I kept up with fictionpress. I recently got into reading fanfiction as my friends write avidly there, and so I kind of wanted to somehow get back here. I don't know if I'm up to writing right now but reviewing I can still do. I figured I'm a critic on fanfiction why not here? So that's when I noticed you're the only author I still get alerts from, seeing as I never disabled them. So I had to come back and check you out, and that's when the title of this story caught my eye, I do believe I help beta this chapter before I dropped off the face of the Earth it would seem. And years later I still find this chapter great. So seeing as my new role my just be as a critic don't feel like you're being stalked if I read and review most if not all of your works, it's just how I work. So keep writing and I'll review it.

The author formally known as A Work in Progress

Its shiny and wonderfully well written

However, the accuracy of "Center for distressed Youth" is a little iffy. Either do research or read the book Cut which is both a good book and eye opener of what kind of places those are.

I'm not allowed to review Chappie 2, since this used to be Chappie 2, and you're only allowed 1 review/chappie. ANYway, just count this as a review for Chappie 2.

The chapter's gone so far... I'm so proud! :'DIt'd be great to continue BETA-ing for you.It's really great. Just one thing... Wayy at the end, "It's okay" should be "It's okay," because COMMAS ARE A NECESSITY!

+_+you've been shot+_+

P.S. Took ya long enough! I checked this over during th ebeginning of the year! :P

Interesting story you have here. I saw your name while reviewing this story and happened to click it by accident. Well I'm happy I did. ^_^

Overall it was well-written, though you have this sentence wherein you switched tenses:

“Mathews,” called a bored voice, and Kari’s head jerked up as the guy with the killer eyes that has given her the headache on the bus walked up to the woman behind the desk.

It should be "that HAD given her..." and not "that HAS..." since you were working with the past tense. Other than that, I like this. Keep writing! ^_^

ps: Would you mind reviewing my story "Lunar Chaos"? Any form of reviews are greatly appreciated, since I would like to improve my writing (praise is good, constructive criticism is greatly appreciated, and flames are accepted, as long as they have a good reason). But please don't feel forced to. ^_^

~Eyes of Amethyst

Hey! Thanx for the review! I'm loving your story do far! I really wanna know why she can see those things. Really awesome! And no misspelled words! FWEE! I added you to my AOL buddy list, I'm on almost all the time. So, maybe I'll talk to you later! Bai Bai! -Saphy

ooh, muy fabuloso.point 1: the orphanage is too similar to a mental facility. at this point, just leave it as a loony bin or edit it more.point 2: Kai seems really, er...interesting. Nice POV change, but Kari is not quite as clear as a character yet.point 3: delete the "note," or just attatch it to the first chapter.

good job, my dear stacy turner. *condescending laugh.*

awesome so far, I really hope you update. X3 keep up the awesome work~-Caddy

It was good and I hope you continue to post. One thing though if she's in an asylum they wouldn't let her walk alone to her room she could run and hide or hurt herself.

I like it! Very well-written. I like the way you showed the parallel thoughts of Kari and Kai, and the disorganized thoughts of Kari are very believable. Keep it up!