Grotesque!

Offensive!

repeating "all those holes in your screams" was VERY effective and gave the poem a strength that the simple rhyming might have taken away.

at some points it seems like you toss stuff in without connecting it to the rest fo the poem, even so, I liked it. well written

best of luck, and happy new year

I've made a habit every so often of checking back and reading your poetry.

There's nothing else to say except that it's "unfathomably brilliant!"

It's so macabre, it oozes wonderment within my mind. At times, the directness smacks you like a hammer.

I'm often left bleeding. Thanks.

- Adam

That ending is the greatest.

[fav]

- Colleen

This is bitter sweet, and it makes me grin, that sarcastic grin. This is kick ass work of fiction!

Thanks for the review!)

I like it. For some reason, it sounds like virtual reality gone awry...good job.

I like the questioning nature of the poem.

Bitter. I like the first one better, but on the second, I like the 'i hope you die which rhymes with cry but i wouldn't'. It's all happy. (Not really, but to me it is.)

I like it. It's sweet in a twisted way.

Kids will be Kids... sickeningly true. Loved it.

Your way with words is incredible. Once again, I am in awe.

Ah, the bitter irony of it all. Love it.

I like the irony and wicked artisticness of it all.

I like the ending a lot.