Oh my god! it has blood in it! i love the fact Arwyn's parents whre murdered and she wants revenge! you know i love that kind of stuff! all my writing has blood (duh), gore, someone that is very loved by the main character dies, and some trace revenge! don't you love to make the characters suffer, even just alittle bit! and btw, blood ain't always chrimson. i should know, i got some very painful and bloody tourcher scense in one of my fanfics...yeah, and hilts of most weapons are silver, steel, or in some cases gold cause the hilt can be just as much a weapon as the blade. and again, i got lots of weapons in all my stories...lots and lots of'em! just sayin, don't change it if ya don't want to, i don't really care.and i forgot ta mention earlier, i love the fact Arwyn's parents where killed when she was so young. i do that alot, i like making my characters suffer! MUHA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA! HA! and another HA! yeah!

I mean, you aren't supposed to actually SAY he likes arwyn. You're supposed to let the reader figure that out through hints...T_T. Plus you made a typo. Have you noticed?

its really good! but kinda sad... but kl! ur a really good writer (lucky...) i bet ur really good in english huh? im like failing english-or wuz-cuz its summer-cuz i cant write at all :)

This is the great start to a story. You do a very good job of describing the characters. Try to give a bit more detail to the places- mostly the inns. Also, make the characters talk differently- not accents, I mean,but either more educated or less, (more for Kyle, less for Arwyn) smoother or less. etc.

Hi! Lol, I'm the only one that read your story that has an account. Chapter One was better. Ugh, the part with Gabrielle is horrible. You're not good at that kind of stuff... I thought Kyle was knocked out?

Hi! This is Tian. This story is actually the better of all three of your stories. The Adrianne story is overwhelming...O...Alexandrite, Queen of Sierra seems interesting. I remember you talking about that one... Are you ever going to upload the one with latin names...umm...I forget what its called. Its the one I read at Chinese school. And are you ever going to write the one with some girl...umm...the one with stepsisters, and who's the reincarnation of Aurora? Wow, long review.