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| Pimpled Boy 2006-06-12 ch 1,  | abuseImpressive poem about music. Yeah, I love music too. Once written a poem about music as well, but it's apparently not as good as this. Keep writing. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-02-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is a great poem. Music really does make everything better. Favorite line: "And I wonder if it's heaven/It sure is high enough..." That is great. I just love the tone of this piece...it makes you happy! Keep writing! :) |
| Saber of shadow 2005-10-25 ch 1, | abuseHi!I am also a singaporean 15 yr old.I heard of u from aiki-chaos.This is not so bad,except that it doesn't speak about all types of music |
| Shades Of Autumn 2005-10-13 ch 1, | abuseIt sure is, hon! |
| revertedautumn 2005-10-11 ch 1, | abusei really do love the imagary that you use. It is beautiful. I don't think i can find another way to put that honestly. |
| wolfeh 2005-10-10 ch 1, | abuseWOW! I KNOW! I KNOW! MUSIC IS AWESOME! JUST LIKE THIS POEM! I LOVED:"Leaving a swirling panpipe wake of fluffy white cotton" YAY! AWESOME! SIMPLY AWESOME! |
| FrozenKiwi 2005-08-29 ch 1, | abuseMusic lifts us up where we belong. Extremely well done. |
| Astarayl 2005-07-26 ch 1, | abuseYou have a really unique style- and this poem is so expressive and vivid. Being a musician myself.. and someone who has a tolerance for all kinds of music- I think you've managed to capture it's spirit quite well xD Although it is entirely impossible.. you've gotten really close ^^ I loved how you strung in all the senses and colors and textures.. it makes for beautiful imagery :D |
| Eyes Unclouded 2005-07-18 ch 1, | abuseI think the title perfectly described this poem - not in the sense of it being loud as the exclamation mark would be imply, but the poem seemed "loudly" jovial, sort of like a great big sigh, like "Ahh, music!" A great poem. I liked the use of the italicized words and the short lines with adjectives strung together like "cheery humid vibrancy". Also, the word "cumulonimbus" caught me eye, and I have to thank you for giving it a line all to itself since it's such a mouthful. I thought only one line was a bit strange: "Sipping at a nectarine" - can you sip at a nectarine? Otherwise, this was a great poem, and I liked the part that read "It sure is high enough..." Very cheerful!! |
| I've left FP 2005-07-17 ch 1, | abuseI sure feel like that when I put on some Trace Adkins and write some cowboy poems! Very understandable, who can't feel like this when they hear music?~`~`~ClAiRe CaLLeSeN~`~`~ |
| EmpressTiger 2005-06-24 ch 1, | abuseHey there, I came to read some of your work...and I'm really glad I did! This piece is just wonderful, its got a very light, happy tone to it. I love the word usage...and the way you say things...like, "sipping at a necatrine"...thats lovely...and the whole poem is full of good stuff liket that! This is a very good poem, keep writing!(Oh and also...thanks for the reivew!) |
| Jaemiz 2005-06-24 ch 1, | abuseyou've portrayed music really well, its nice, floaty and definitely a beautiful feeling. |
| Melanie Layugan 2005-06-24 ch 1, | abuseMusic is a lovely feeling, you might be here but the brain is elsewhere imagining. I loved how you captured the way I feel about music. Keep up the work. |
| Winter Reflections 2005-06-23 ch 1, | abusei agree. i love music! it has helped me out of some very tight spots. love it! keep writing |
| Savannah 2005-06-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseI told you I'd read these. You are a really good writter, and really descriptive. Kudos to you... haha. |