| Reviews for Forevermore and Nevermore |
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swift sky silver 6/24/05 . chapter 1wow, you describe the feeling well. it's very nicely put in words. keep up the wonderful work 0) |
iona-buss 6/23/05 . chapter 1Thanks for reviewing my poem. Just read one of yours hope to read the rest soon enough. Anyway I love this one I really felt the emotion come across. It was a nice poem to read as it had such a nice flow to it too. :) |
Cemetary Gates 6/23/05 . chapter 1I think this piece can be empathized by readers easily. If you were aiming for that, then it worked - I was involuntarily comparing my own experiences with relationships to the one described in this poem. I like tempestuous. I've never heard that one before. But my suggestion here is to use more words like this to match the diction in the rest of the poem. It adds unity and regularity, and ultimately helps the poem flow better. And... "May storm and ravage the heightened depth of thoughts". Were you meaning "May storm ravage the heightened depth of thoughts"? Or "May storm and ravage heighten depth of thoughts?" Good job, and keep writing! |