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YaoiFanBoy 2008-07-04 ch 13,	abuseI love this story, it was amazing and I really enjoyed it the way you bought the characters to life was really good.
Yellow skittles 2008-06-10 ch 14,	abuseIts true that there isn't a thirteenth floor ,but the people on the fourteenth floor...They all know where they are...
Lal111 2008-05-29 ch 18,	abuseThanks. A very good story. I'm off to check the others you've written. :)
RealityIsRealitive 2008-02-18 ch 18,	abuseGood story. I'm glad it got nominated for the SKOWs. It was kind of weird that there were no female characters, but no addition characters were needed, so it worked out. Nice work.
raenfell 2008-02-17 ch 1,	abuseaw! this story is so cute. i love the happy ending, and that Evan's nan is just as grumpy as Wynn.
Yellow skittles 2008-02-16 ch 18,	abuseI got to say the gangsters were my favorite characters though drunken Wynn comes pretty close. love your stories.
Lac3d w1th p01s0n 2008-01-19 ch 18,	abuseThis was one of the best MxM fictions I've read in a good while. The characters are well developed, the plot is consistent, and it's not a chapter and then sex (with the exception of Will and Perry because that's just what we know of their nature). My biggest criticisms are that there are some places where you only mention something briefly where the next few chapters revolve around it (I missed one part and then had to go back and re-read carefully). The other criticism is purely stylistic, and that is that you often use periods as replacement for commas in dialogue. It's just a little bit different and threw me for a loop. Overall I really loved this story, and I'm incredibly sad that there's no sequel :( Love, p0!s0n PS. I had no idea ficpress would even allow those sun-thingies.
Cari Marie 2007-10-28 ch 5,	abuseI absolutely adore your story. I thought that I would point out that there is a typo in chapter five.-- Evan was leaving the hospital, his shift over for the evening, when he ran into River. River was wrapped in his too-thin coat, hands shoved into his pockets and his boots scuffed as he walked towards the entrance to the hospital. His shoulders were hunched a bit and the way he frowned and his eyebrows scrunched together suggested he was worried about something. “River!” Evan called, smiling cheerfully. River started, his head snapping up and he turned to smile at Evan. “Hello, Wynn.” River greeted quietly, changing direction to walk towards Evan. “How’s Casey?” Evan asked, opting for a roundabout route. -- River should say hello to Evan b/c Wynn's not there. I don't expect you to repost the chapter or anything, I'd just thought I'd let you know.
Kilian 2007-09-18 ch 18,	abuseNice story, thank you very much for it. I particularly liked the irascible Wynn. Hey dind't River transformed into a softer character along the line ? It seemed to me at first that he was less shy.
firedraygon97 2007-09-17 ch 18,	abuseWonderful, wonderful fic! I really love these 6 friends, the way they know and get to know each other. Fantastic work with this.
Osunale 2007-03-29 ch 18,	abuseThis is a very interesting read. There are flaws - Stef disappearance, quick personality changes - but this is one heck of a good story. It's well-told with fascinating and developed characters, and every chapter just leaves the reader begging for more. The scene where Will and Perry first meet left me particularly impressed...you capture the lechers hitting it off moment perfectly. The story is delightfully humorous at parts, and touching in others, and tone always seems to fit the situation/characters. It's sad to reach the end because it was so easy to become attached to Wynn, Evan, River, and the others, but the conclusion in itself is very satisfying...the story's not drawn out, and not ended too abruptly. Good work, excellent story.
Simple-2-Blink 2007-01-23 ch 18,	abuseWOW. took me about 12 hours to read but it was very well written I love how great the people in the story and how complex they were. my favorite was Evan, he was in short, sweet and yet still had his minor flaws. and I loved how unique everyone was. the biggest thing I loved was how everyone was connected in a small way like how wytt and casey had dated the two brothers and yet did not make the association. the story was well developed and Im envious... thanks Blu
Awe 2006-10-27 ch 18,	abuseAnd now it really is and an end. Wow. I have spent the last few days reading and reviewing this story, and I have to say I grew to love it more and more as the chapters went on. The characters developed, had senarios, made great situations, and experienced trauma and trouble and I loved it. Great detail, great description. A couple odd typos, but considering my writing, it's pathetic to have pointed that out (today I accidentally wrote "step any closer and I'll break my other arm." instead of "and I'll break /his/ other arm.") The random facts were awesome. I really, really like those gangsters. Casey is inducingly cheerful (you don't have to get that either)! And Stef...yeah, I noticed she disappeared. So she really WAS eaten by an allosuarus? All in all, I really enjoyed reading this story, adn I hope you got that little detail from my reviews. Obviously I'm not going to beg you for a sequel, but if you ever do write with these characters again, I'm going to happily attack it, because they just are that good. This story (and the muffin one) has caused me to laugh, worry, and lose sleep, and I wouldn't trade a minute of it back. Also, as soon as November is over (there is no way I could handle being addicted to more of your stories next month), I'm going to be rabidly reading all you other stuff. And considering that there's a LOT of it, I apologise if I flood your inbox. XD it must've been interesting to get 18 reveiws within three days, all from the same random rambling person. See you in December!
Awe 2006-10-27 ch 17,	abuseI didn't like the ending. Well, I did--I don't mean I didn't like it I meant that I didn't like that it ended. I'm looking forward to reading the epilogue. Poor River. Poor Casey. And everyone. But at least things are looking up and the future is as well! That's nice. It was a nice ending. Little comment on your author's note: I am glad you didn't make Wynn all smiles out of nowhere. I've seen some stories where the persona changes a bit too much and it can feel weird. But you are so right--a person might get happier, but that doesn't mean they don't stay they're natural quite, or stressed, or frowny-faced. It would be fun to see more of the gangsters! I like them! Red banda~anas...
Awe 2006-10-27 ch 16,	abuseNote to self: trying to read storeis like this while others are in the room is a Bad Idea. Especially when it makes one laugh or go "aw" repeatedly. River is so cute, and I love the Perry; "I'ma go beat him up. Evan will help." W00t! I hope that casey has no difficulties going clubbing when haf his face is bruised and he has a concussion. That would be awkward, I'd think... I'm starting to get a bit more about Terrence and Aaron now, although I'm confused about if there was backstory. But it's okay! (and you can disreguard my last plead for help if you so choose. I'm mostly getting stuff now, so.) Gah...just a few more chapters left...

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