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Eyetk 2005-06-26 . chapter 1
Hmm, interesting! Yay for psionics--you have to love those.

I've got a few CCs for you, though, since I love handing them out:

First, what's with the two sentences ("Take me..." "Bad! Very bad!") at the end? They don't seem to fit. More detail, so that they -do- fit, might help, here.

Second, wasn't the boy keeping the orderlies away from him? If so, how was one able to knock him out? Snuck up on him, or something of the sort?
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