I like this poem a lot. I hope you write more like it.

I really like this poem! The imagery is amazing, especially for a poem. It's hard to use imagery in poems, especially since even one syllable can throw off your rhythm and ruin your poem. You did a very good job: I really like the short first lines. I would suggest writing a rhymed version of this, just to see if it gives it a better rhythm. I'm a die-hard rhyme fanatic, so I think almost any poem might sound better if the author added some rhyming to it. You would just perhaps make a new story called "Migration/Rhymed Version" and see how the people like it. It might work out, it might now. I just thought that rhyming this poem might make it better. Peace out.