Good so you need to describe the setting a little more .It is really intesting how you keep jumping around ,but make sure that the reader knows that you have moveto an other setting

OH MY FREAKING GOSH! SHE UP-DATED! *clasps hands over cheeks in awe* anyway, nice twist, you'd better get the next chapter up sooner or I shall quit reading your story in protest.

(logged out)

SQUEE! U UPDATED! MORE WOMAN MORE!

*dances around house singing 'u updated'*

This is really good continue ...

i swear if u dont update i'll kill u

OH MY GOD *sorry God* SHE UP-DATED... WOW *stares in awe at her computer* WOW anyway good chapter but watch the run-ons like: ""I was laughing at Zack for even attempting to catch up with me and Saber saw the fence and jumped it just like we always do but I wasn’t holding on very tight with my legs and fell off.”"

ok I up dated High School now UPDATE THIS! NOW! *holds sock up threatenly* NOW!

um... I'm re-reading everything and like the conections between Pipper and Ryan and Pipper and Saber... they came too fast... it's kind of confusing... and why does Pipper so instantly HATE Zack? anyways its a good story line and everything...

Keep the chapters coming Jo! _

Anna

that sucks, i wouldn't want that 2 happen.

this is pretty cool. I like it. ok, well, update soon, can't wait!

Smart Mouth

Hey Jo, this is really cool! _ Keep writing this, I like! _

eh? thats it? oo...i know where this is going...oh, du u think ma-b u could re-review Girl In the Black Kimono? I had to remove and repost

LYLAS keep writing!

o...what next?

YAY! You updated! I really love the way this story is turning out. Keep it up!

Love you lots, always and forever, Anna! -xoxo-