Reviews for Beloved Years - FictionPress.com

Reviews For: Beloved Years - Reviews: Page 1 of 2

Anon 2006-05-02 ch 29, anon.	abuseabout time 4 another chapter. This chapter was as funny as all the others and also it gives it that mysterious quality. It was awesome and I look forward 2 readin the other chapters when u write them
RTD 2006-05-02 ch 29, anon.	abuseYour story continues to unfold in excellent fashion tho some chapters can be a little random and as such confusin.I hope that the "Komrades" will soon reunite and create some new michief or adventure.Perhaps some chapters on the central war (flashbacks)to clarify its signifcance and the parts the cast played in more detail.Sincerly YoursRover The Dog
"Yayno" aka wanker103 2005-12-21 ch 28, anon.	abuseI'm sick of this!?Ok, im sick of this, and yea i mite break up with wendy thanks to you dicks! So why dont you all go F# yourselves! P.S. Im also gay.
ANON 2005-12-12 ch 28, anon.	abuseGreat ideas 4 stories. Love the characters and the arses they make of themselves. I think u need 2 add abit more varity and talk bout the other characters and there stupid adventures
Orochi... 2005-11-30 ch 1, anon.	abuseYes it is I, Orochi again... Why do you pick on me so much?I am over "akemi" and you know that. Please stop the mocking of me and my friend "yayno" he didnt mean what he did!
Starbrat 2005-11-26 ch 1,	abuseA few things: First, it's really not professional to put a cast list at the beginning of a story. The rule is "show, don't tell" - besides, nobody's going to remember that much info in one take. Secondly, the last war Japan had was WWII - when is this, and what kind of war heros are they? It does sound like a good story, but I'd suggest fixing those two things.
THE SERPENT~ 2005-10-21 ch 1, anon.	abuseOrochi speaks! Yes, I am that dreaded snake, the one readers of this story love to hate. I must say, while er, 'lovingly' crafted, there are a number of spelling, continuity and grammatical errors. (For the Serpent's perfectionism, that JUST isn't good enough! ^^) Great story, however, and to quote one of my predecessor reviewers; "we ARE horrible people!" ~..."residing in his heart was a serpent, one more venomous than any living creature..."
Random 2005-10-05 ch 22, anon.	abusehey love the story and how u relate it 2 yr "friends" personal events. It is kinda mean but it hell funny so it an enjoyable read. Just dont b 2 mean or some of your mates might want 2 hurt u.And please dont let Yasano kill turtle wax that would just ruin the whole story
Komrade... 2005-08-25 ch 17, anon.	abusehaha, great story. Really brings out the true nature of those upon who its based upon...We are horrible people...
Collarander the Unicorn 2005-08-25 ch 17,	abuseEhh...? I'm working with a group of "skimpy dressed women and hard out guys...?" ...o_O I mean, yeah, go Lance! But the rest of them didn't sound too great in that other chappie, umm...I think it might've been chappie 11.Ah well, that name you used is old, and kinda obvious to what my real name is...o_O Why did I get the strange name?
Anon 2005-08-23 ch 17, anon.	abuseHey y r u so mean 2 Dwasa. She sounds sweet and like a good person. and y is Minako always with Buntaro or Dwasa. Doesn't she have her own life and y do we not hear bout the other characters very much. Still an enjoyable story and can't wait 2 read the rest
Unknown 2005-08-11 ch 15, anon.	abuseHey thought yr story was weird slightly funny but mainly weird. Which of yr characters r based on yr "komrades" from high skool and is some of the stuff u say bout them tru or is it just made up. One thing u need to work on is yr spellin coz some of the words dont make sense. All in All a great read and cant wait 2 read the rest of the chapters.
Pawnik 2005-08-07 ch 1,	abuseA criticism of this particular page, unless it is a script, its best just to introduce the characters through the story. It gains more interest and the reader isn't bombarded with details. But its good because it looks like you know all your characters on a personal level which always helps with writing fiction.
Cameron aka Renosa 2005-08-04 ch 13, anon.	abuseVery good Nick! And I'm not even offended! Just what i expected, humourous, intelligent and well-crafted. A worthwhile read. PS - I won't sue you!
s 2005-08-01 ch 6, anon.	abuseDwasa is so sweet. Not.

Return to Top