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| AmyBabe 2007-01-10 ch 2,  | abuseI think this had real potential. I love the engaging stile of describing the scene, though i think it slips a bit after she yells at her father. I also like the description of Kaipo and how Acacia slaps him. If you keep the same tone and lengthen your chapters tis could be really good. Hope i haven't offended you. Happy new year. AmyBabe |
| Gabby 2006-01-15 ch 2, anon. | abusei like it. it sounds like it will be very sweet and funny. |
| R.M.Whitaker 2005-09-08 ch 2, | abuseLOL! What a cute, well-written begining! More, please! I beg for more! |
| lilred07 2005-08-07 ch 2, anon. | abuseinteresting first 2 chapters im excited to see what you will do next! |
| babypig 2005-08-05 ch 2, | abuseomg!! i really like your story! i can almost hear the bell in my head that tells me when i have another favortie...almost though. first you have to be a good updater and then madamme to favorites list you go!lolsrry im rambling, ANYWAY i really like your story. you started it off great! it makes you wanna stay and hear more. therefore the second chapter comes in handy!!i love your description of everything!!okay now the bad part...THERE IS NONE!! okay i got to calm down too much candy!lolupdate! |
| Maury Hime 2005-07-12 ch 2, | abuseokay, this is TOTALLY my favorite story! Dude, it's like, i don't know! Girl kicks **, boy is too sweet to care, I LOVE IT! Adoration! Worship! This is completely brilliant. ::dies:: okay i've written a few good reviews, read my stuff now? |
| TopazDragon 2005-07-05 ch 2, | abuseThis is good. Update! |
| brainymandy 2005-06-28 ch 1, | abuseIt seems to be a proising beginning- there were a few spelling issues that detracted from my enjoyment, but other than that, it is the start of a good story! |