interesting... a progression of thoughts on hope. First, barely believing, then doubt... thinking hope is decieving, then that it is good... but in the end, you're just left brocken as in the begining.

also, I did indeed fix my hiaku! thanks for pointing that out...

I was going with it until i got to deceased and then i kinda felt a *thump* inside because it left me a little well, hmm...unsatisfied? I didnt really see it fitting into the poem s'all. The rest of it is all marvelous and such good imagrey and i feel for it because i myself when it comes to important things am quite a pessimist and try to force all hope out of me before it clouds my vision and makes me think happy thoughts. I guess we do it because it's a lesser distance to fall if we're pushed off into the rocky cliff, eh?

I like this one a lot. It makes me feel something when I read it...

Good job )

great poem really sad i like it (thankx 4 reviewing my poems :))

heatherxx

Really great stuff here! Nice and angsty!

When reading your profile I had the urge to shout that you like almost EXACTLY everything the same as me! Duude!

Anyroad, lovely work!

Rozie x