Well, couple typos here and there, but a very interesting start. The prisoner interests me, she seems resolute despite what she's suffered. A very intriguing piece--is it something you plan to continue?

Hm...intriguing. You will continue this right? I'd like to see the engima that is Ayda unfold. Only suggestion is to watch for repitition - paragraph 3, last sentence: "...that sheered their light into the room, but welcomed the somewhat fresh air that entered the room." Nix the last 'the room.' It sounds somewhat cluttered, is all.

(By the way...I don't think this is poetry...)

All in all, great story. Keep writing!