This is truly a very good story. The plot is complex, while not being convoluded and the characters seem less flat than many stories on this website have them. One of the few things I'm worried about is whether or not you have abandonned this story. It's a shame if you have decided to, but there is nothing we as readers can do. It would be nice if you posted some sort of notification about you continueing or leaving "Passion in the Depths". It has been over three years since you last posted. If you are seeking to get it published, that would also be nice to know.

Hey!

So, I've been waiting to read this story for a month (the first time I half-read the prologue I was grounded 'till the end of the school year, but it's summer break now, so YAY!).

First I thought that the firs paragraphs were really good, 'cause I could practically feel the cold, but then i fell in love withthe fight scene. Espesially the whole 'slipped in the thick blood of men split onto the ground; once, she fell and landed beside the open eyes of a dead solider'. You really got me there.

I can't promise that I'll review every chapter, 'cause I'm really dizzy, but I will read the rest of the story and I'll try to leave a review here and there.

K.

xoxo

HEYY!
This is really good and its obvious by the amount f reviews that I'm not the only one to think so!! Will you be continuing with this novel? I hope you do! I know school takes up a lot of time, but I really have enjoyed it so far and hope that you will consider continuing this again!
Keep up the hard work!
Alexa xox

I want a pet tiger! xD

Well that side...

You forgot at "t" on "he" here...

"for he prince’s taste."

Bah...guess that's it...at least that I caught...xD It's two in the morning, so my mind isn't that sharp...xD

Haha! I knew it! The princess wears glasses! By the way, she's a fun character...and I love Ravi too!! :D

Hi.

Like I said earlier...nice flow. :D The pacing seems to be totally awesome...not too slow or too fast. Yeah, I had assumed there was a reason for Ravi's unusual behavior...Oh yeah! That reminds me...

In your sentence...

"...even more unusual was that Raví kept at least one knife tucked into his leather boots at all time – usually more."

I don't think you need the last phrase, "unusally more" because you already said earlier in the sentence that having the knife was unusal by having the phrase, "even more unusual."

Just something I noticed...other than...pretty cool...liked the Princess's entrance. It seemed as if she had trouble seeing...or was exremely confused...o.O

Oh well...hope to hear from you soon... :3

Hi there.

REALLY enjoyed reading this story, especially your first few paragraphs where you described the slaves' rooms. It made me feel like I was in a musty room too. As I read through the prologue, I noticed how smooth everything flowed. Very nice.

I only have some minor concerns...

"Sadie anticipated seeing all of the evil and iniquity of the world in that green, expected to find greed, and the guilt of innocent deaths; but, instead found a strange passion hidden within the depths."

As much as I reread this sentece, and even though I knew what you meant, it kept sounding odd to me. In that green what? And is "instead found a strange passion hidden within the depths" a complete senetence? If not, the ";" is missused. Bah! I'm still learning about grammar. xD

In your pharse...

"The female grunted. “Glad you noticed.”"

Shouldn't there be a comma after grunted? It's the same as...She said, "I like chocolate." Which I do...I love chocolate!! :D

And last...

"Her face touched the blood of his body, which seeped out from his new wound, and she cried out."

I don't think you need "the blood of his body" here. Simply saying "his blood" it's understood that it's from his body...I mean...it is his blood...o.O The same with "new wound." It's understood his wound is "new" because the battle is still going on and it was a wound he didn't have before.

Just some things you might wanna look at and stuff...xD

Like I said, I really enjoyed reading this...I shall try to read the rest whenever I can...:D

P.S. Please excuse my spelling...I'm a HORRIBLE spelling...aw.../cry

HEY..ARE YOU EVER GONNA UPDATE?! i REALLY LIKE THE TONE OF THE STORY THOUGH ^_^

Well this seems strange. Fitting names, a passable prologue, and a nice confortation between Ryder and this millicent.

WHOOPS! The last anonymous review on Chapter 28 is from me! Sorry about that!

Wow! I absolutely love your story! You must post soon! The characters are so profound, and they are connected by the most intricate patterns! Your characters are believable, the story is easy to follow, and you change point of views enough to keep us on our toes! Keep up the good work!

Looking forward to your next update! (hopefully by the end of this year)

love the romance between the prince and millie. so unusual and ifferent but i like it. love the other things too. please update.

once again I REALLY like it. I'm very inrigued and will definitely keep reading. These are just some things that stood out to me while reading and that I personally found annoying(so It might be jsut me, I don't know)
-The fact that Ravi calls Ryder Princie. I know that they're chummy, but it's a weird nickname and bothers me a bit.
-When Ravi sees Millicent and Ryder on the kitchen floor he says "What are you guys doing?" The "guys" seems a bit anachronistic. Maybe what are you two doing?
-Would they have glasses then? Maybe you could call them spectacles to make it fit in more. Once again, it jsut bothered me.
-When Ravi says "ya know" in the beginning of one of the chapters(i forget which) it just seems odd and a bit slangish.
Hope those help!
I can't wait to keep reading!

Wow. I really like it so far. You know how to create an attention getter, that's for sure. No CC on this chap, just one little thing though.
“No, Sadie! Stay down here where it’s safe…please,” a child said, looking up at her with pleading eyes.
I can't imagine a child saying that. It just sounds too adult. Maybe something like It's safer, or something(I know it's bad grammar, but kids have that. It just stood out to me.

This is really great so far...I'll keep reading and reviewing.