An interesting adaptation of the Rattenfänger von Hameln. It was interesting seeing it from a slightly different point of view. If you go to Hameln (or as the English speakers spell it, Hamelin) they actually have a Pied Piper tour complete with history and a lot of statues of rats.

ok...wow. this was really REALLY good. I like adaptions of well known stories, usually. I liked it that the children imediately liked the Piper, even though others didn't always. and the last line was perfect for the story. good job! i'm going to read your other stuff as soon as I have a spare second.

...interesting twist on an old story. you did an excellent job on this, i particularly like how you make the piper so charismatic. I need to reread the original Pied Piper somepoint soon. anyway, good story. hope you update Children of the Wilds soon.

Shadowhound

Woah.

Tsch. Sempai, this really *should* be a fanfic, onee.

As I read the title, I thought that this would be about a girl named Piper, or something. Then once you mentioned Hamelin I connected the dots...

The idea was very unique. I don't know of how many people that are familiar with this story,but it is one of my favorites. You added depth and extra meaning to it.

My only thing was that once he led the rats out of the city, it seemed a little rushed-you had this excellent buildup towards the moment, but it went by quickly.

The ending was perfect, it really fit. good job.

That was absolutely brilliant. You make a wonderful use of words and I could imagine all of it very beautifully. More so, that you took one of my favorite tales of all time and turned into something very special. This was an astounding story.

er, did I tell you how much this freaks me out. Well it does. It was great as all of your works are, it just freaked me out. I don't have too much to say, but at least I reviewed. Err, the next chapter of Deadly Games, i think the title is, will be out by friday, not sure exactly when. isn't it great how i can't remember the title of one of my own stories?Later.

wow... this is a very interesting story. A little scary even. Especially the ending... O_o I think it would make a good introduction to a longer story if you wanted to make it longer but as it is right now it is still very awesome.

Creepy. Did everyone else die too?

I never liked the fairy tale version of this story because he ran all of the rats off of a cliff. Yours is definitely better.

Mayo Tommer is so sad. His wife and parents died!

Ahah! The other towns talked of Tommer's rats! Lolz!

Stubborn Tommer! All HIS fault! Argh!

Wo-o-o-ow. I don't blame Piper very much, accept he should have been more patient. but Tommer should just keep his promise!

Very well-done! I really like it!

Julia.

Hey I really love this. This is the first story I've read on this site and I think its amazing. Your descriptions are brilliant and I was hooked from the first sentance. I'd say more but I'm speachless!!

Erk. Sinister! But very, very good... you've got a couple of spelling mistakes ("faze" instead of "gaze" and "beet" instead of "beat") but other than that your spg is good too.

Brilliant version. I adore it.

whoa... neat. i like it. u should do more like that. good job. kiss kiss!