Your rhythum was a bit off - inconsistent for a traditional poem. Example: the sad things is I cannot stop, to realise that I cannot stop.I really enjoyed the 5th stanza, 'your words have scarred..."The fluency and images were excellent. If that could be maintained the through-out... it would be excellent.

Dude, I love the way you can write such opposing stuff. Beautiful poem.

Wonderful poem, Saxon. The tone is a lot different than a lot of your other humorous works, but this is an excellent piece of literature nonetheless. Very spazzy.

On another note, it's good to see you back!

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Reminds me of a song in some way . . . Good poem, though. The rhyming and stuff is excellent. Yeah. Go this poem.

That sounded like a rocky relationship, in my opinion you should let him/her go. There is one typo and you are right: anyone who did not read this poem is missing out.