No such thing as the outside world? It's like this story is pulled some 1984 or something in that genre. Cool story. I like this

The way you title chapters is funny and weird at the same time. This kind of reminds me of something like ELmore Leonard but with manga cut in.

keep writing. i hope you make your chapters longer in the future. =]

good character development. each of their individuality really comes through. =)

i was expecting the cliche, that the masked stranger was going to be a drop dead gorgeous prince charming. i sense a plot even in the prologue, unlike many of the stories posted here. interesting names. how do you pronounce "lonai"?