interesting beginning, dear. "If you needn’t be seen, don’t be" - i like that right, i'll come back and read more tomorrow. need sleep.

good work, though.

WHY WOULD YOU LEAVE IT THERE? (howls) This is such a good story! I love the characters so far, you're spacing things out nicely. (puppy dog eyes) But that was a mean cliffhanger. I really wanna know what happens next, please update soon!

CROSS BOW! The shadows are leik WAY better than the angels though! Alexa has knives and darkness and a cooler tower block thing. Why do those Angels show off so much anyhover? It's a bit of a tactical error. Ooh will there be a dragon!

Like the ideas :), its coming on really well, AH you spelt Erika with a K, its much cooler with a c. Anyway if I had helped it wouldn't be as good, luv saz

Ooh, I like this story. . The concept is really good. Update soon!

Hmm! Interesting (if short) start.

My one CC that I'd have for you is already written out on another page, which has been specifically created for this exact purpose:

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Hmm...Sounds interesting so far. Will the whole story be from that person's POV? Or will it switch between the two mages? Can't wait for more.