The ending is a really interesting idea. The contraast is most striking because of the situation, 'Grinning your signature grin' and '(i can only see you clad in a letter jacket)' stood out most to me.

The idea. Damn, it's observant.

Great job! I really liked this!

very gripping and interesting.

really, you don't see many people when they are at home and relaxed, where they are most comfortable.

its interesting though, because for once, its not always a beauty contest.

well, for girls it is, for guys i would have to assume a contest of sorts, maybe not beauty though...

well written and put.

i liked it.

I really liked the parenthese parts.