that had a musical meter, and excellent flow. Love the lines, "Whistle me a tune/ I'm hugry and bored/ Tell me a secret/ I smiled while you snored.Also, it was easy to relate to, good job!

Wow this was awesome keep it up.

Wow! A fantastic rythmic poem with very sensual words as well as visual ideas.

You colored the darkness like nobody I've seen yet.

you capture emotion so well, another great poem

+SpiLLeD InK+

Oh that's so sweet in some way :) It was very beautiful. Thanks so much for the review. Sorry I have not been online. I have been working tons. Me and Nathan are. . . okay I guess? He's still in counselling, and seems to be a lot better. Sometimes he still seems like his old self, but he always feels *really* bad after he gets mad so I think we will be fine. Me and him sat in a dark closet for almost two hours today, just talking. lol. Yeah I guess we are back to "normal" or however normal we can be! :)

I can't wait for some new writing from you! Sorry I haven't updated in forever. . . I blame it on work and lack of inspiration. haha. I'll try to be online sometime in the near future, probably not tomorrow though because I have to go to my grandma's all day. Well, talk to you soon! Say hi to Brendan for me!

aaww. it's like a a love/haunting letter but not at the same time... it's cute. lol. "i smile while you snore" hehe.. :)

Good job on the ending and I liked the rhyming! :) -NB

woah, very nice, i love the ending. great job! the way it was described was wonderful. one of my favs. ^_^--kwazykandypie AKA Kelly Ann--

KOOL! that flowed really well with the rhymes and got the point across quickly! Sad but sweet.. ~TRW

Sweet and solemn, ~Writer of Darkness~

great poem... the rhymes worked really well... the verses were great, too, and i especially loved the ending... the lines 'the bed sheets were freezing/but as i promised/ yours truly' was brilliant... great job and keep up the good work... btw, if u have time and want to, i'd love sum reviews on sum of my work, especially 'once in a blue moon'...

nice poem, good rhyming and good flow of the words. its actually really sweet...:D