Reviews for Suburban Succubus

HummerLover48 2005-07-15 ch 1,	abuseerm, i dont really have much to say, it good :D
Story-Teller's Aide 2005-07-11 ch 1,	abuseI like this and the way it progresses towards the end.
holocaustpulp 2005-07-04 ch 1,	abuseI thought this poem's message was well-said and contained much substance. Despite this, I personally feel the poem lost some of its soul because of it was dragged out into a story, where the detailed description was more used against the poem. Perhaps some writing techniques like a few metaphors thrown in would remedy this, but I am not trying to defame your skilled examination of the supermarket and its atmosphere (which was another high point of the poem). I used to write poems like this one, and this type occaisonally proves very satisfying - yet (this is a suggestion, I don't know of your other poems) it is good to possess poetic variation in different writings. Good work, and I think humanity can redeem itself. - Holocaustpulp
miss understanding 2005-07-01 ch 1,	abuseThis is so dark and from such a cynical standpoint. I really loved your poem, and the humorous parts kept it flowing smoothly, although you lost me at the last few lines... Great job!
liz anya 2005-07-01 ch 1,	abuseI like this. The details make me hungry, and the end leaves something to contemplate.