I liked it. The fact that it was a very hopeful thing, it made me thinkl(also, thanks for reviewing my pomes ^^)

When you are done one line...you just jump to the next. Now dont get me wrong- thats fine! But maybe you wanted something to seperate it, such as a , or a - or whatever you feel like!

But other than that, I have nothing else to pick on. Its a wonderful poem, and I lloved it! Keep writting and updating! ~Kelsey