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| MorbidTruth 2005-07-03 ch 1,  | abuseHoly hell, Kelsey!! This is beautiful. And the rhyming was awesome! Total kudos. I miss you girl!! Keep up the great work. |
| chaotic-collide 2005-07-03 ch 1, | abuseits good, i wanna see that movie now |
| beti213 2005-07-03 ch 1, | abusehm... thinking about it, it must be tough on the whores, seriously. original concept. you're right about the rhyming; I'd advise you to look it over and try to omit anything that sounds forced or even better, drop the rhyme and concentrate on the images your words create. vivid and well done. |
| Faithless Juliet 2005-07-03 ch 1, | abuseI like this, very Veronica-Franco-ish. You really speak with an honest and heartfelt voice, and that really shows through. I love Dangerous beauty by the way, and I've read all of Veronica Franco's actually poetry, through very few of it servives. You should check that out as well if you enjoyed the film and havn't already.Keep up the good work. Much love,Juliet. |