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| Moonjava 2005-08-29 ch 1,  | abuseVery sad, but I do like it though. |
| pneumothorax 2005-08-17 ch 1, | abuseThe last line didn't seem to quite 'go' at first. 'it's all a tad belittling' I liked this line. It seems directly human. |
| addie pray 2005-08-09 ch 1, | abuseThis is so beyond gorgeous. I usually dislike rhyme (sp?), but you really pulled it off. All of these lines are just brilliant in this off-beat, imagery-focused way. |
| in theory 2005-08-04 ch 1, | abuseDelicious language, I love how you seemingly neglected any punctuation, it gave this a smooth, almost simple composition. Lovely on the eye. =) |
| Escapist 2005-07-14 ch 1, | abuseGOD do I love Placebo. The beginning is perfectly phrased & I like the rhyme scheme, & I think that was the first time I've ever said that. |
| faking closure 2005-07-12 ch 1, | abuseHm very pretty, you have quite a way with words. :) --Naomi hearts |
| miss lavender 2005-07-04 ch 1, | abuseWonderful! The rhyme just.. totally worked; which is a r-a-r-e quality to find! It actually made sense and had meaning, it was w-o-n-d-e-r-f-u-l! Great job! :Lavandula |
| lackluster 2005-07-04 ch 1, | abusei like this. it says quite a lot, and it is very true. and sad also. great work ~tuesday |