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| Meg Bones 2006-01-30 ch 1,  | abusePersonally i love this poem, especially the line 'unquestionably soiled'. But then again I wouldn't expect any less from one of my brethren. |
| Theory Of The 4th Dimension 2005-12-21 ch 1, | abuseAwesome, loved the brevity in this for it still speaks so much! |
| The Un-great-ful 2005-10-25 ch 1, | abuseDid you write this when you were suffering one of those acute chemical imbalances? I can see the imagery here where others would find themselves stagnating in a portal of their own slimy green faecal matter. THE USELESS BASTARDS! HOW DARE THEY WRITE THEIR WORDS ON MY PLANET! Sometimes i almost get a glimpse of whats wrong with me, then the thought gets trampled to death by the vile Chimera that lives in my skull. |
| Rozlin 2005-07-29 ch 1, | abusevery interesting... |
| simpleplan13 2005-07-13 ch 1, | abusewow.. very pwoerful & very true.. awesome job |
| The Rain's Kiss 2005-07-04 ch 1, | abusethis was short. personally, i hate short poems. im not into the whole, "a rain falls from the sky" the end type of poem. its like those paintings in art museums worth tones of money that are painted all black with one red line across the centre and everyone thinks they're amazing because it represents the universe or something. i mean, dont get me wrong, i love being analytic and stuff but that's overdoing it to a nasty extreme. anyways, the point of this was that i just wanted to comment on the fact that i like your idea. but personally,i think you should change it and make it a little longer and give it more body. maybe add some end ryhme or if you're feeling creative, make is syllabic. good luck with that. |