This, oddly, makes me depict a raisin. You know how raisins wither and shrink in the sun? Right. Anywho, I would've really liked to her to song to this. I figure the music would be somewhat sad and deep just like how the poem is and just like how I love all my poems.

To sum it up: Great job!

As usual,

Mentally Malfunctioned,

SoulfulRepentance

This poem brings good emotion too it, it makes me feel really alone and confused. I do not know if that is what you intended but that's how I feel. Haha. In whole this is a very well written poem. I would love to hear it with music, it would make a beautiful song. Anyways, good luck and continue writing!

I don't know if I like this or not. But it makes me feel. I don't know what i feel but It makes me feel none the less. Which is what a good poem does so I guess I do like it.

dark88poet

p.s.

that made no sensesorry