Is this meant to be how you would feel as air, or how air itself feels to be air? For in the last line you write "I float down out of the air" How can air float out of air? And you show that air is above everything when it is all around us, even on the ground, hence our ability to breathe. :) I know this comes across as a bit harsh. I just want you to understand it doesn't make complete sense, or at least not to me. I love the style though, and enjoy the imagery and that soaring, freedom feeling.

I wonder if you're writing this, wishing you had the same qualities of either the sky or a bird, being able to "complete your dream" of observing the world the way, say, an angel would. But if its not inspired by something like that, then forget I said anything.