The descriptions you use to describe the mind are creative, but the way you have chosen to arrange them comes across to me as boring and drawn out. Overall...not your best piece of work, although the potential is there for a steller poem. It just needs something to give it life.

Well, after this, you're getting put on my author alert list. It's not like this poem is super complex, it just says the right thing in the right places, and it captures that wonderfully blessing/curse we call a mind in a perfect way

Beautiful poem. I like your rhyme scheme; the rhymes seem to flow so naturally without any forced tones. The comparisons are apt and the imagery vivid... Keep up the good work! :)