Woah. Totally reminds me of a mix of A) an excellent peice by umm...Frost? no. Delangilo? Perchance. I can't recall. Good peice, nonetheless. or B) some kicka celtic song by the Barra MacNeils. (one of their only origional lyrics) Acutally, I have no idea if you know who they are, I'm just assuming since you said you enjoyed celtic music in your profile (finally took the time to check it out. Have to say I'm pleased. you remind me of myself, accept, of course, for the fact that i will most likely never see Iatly again. -sigh- In any case. I think that the rhyming seemed a bit forced, (not horrible horrible, and I've seen some pretty awful ones...just a little wince here and there. Not that bad. just needs a bit o' tweaking.) I love alot of the aneligies (comepletly butchered spelling? Whatev. You know what I'm talking about. Why yes, I did just say whatev. And yes, I'm twitching too. -shuder-)All in all, very nice peice. I am pleased. Charming job.

PSLOTR is SO not si-fi and loving it should never be referred to as a guilty pleasure! -sob- The blasphomy! Cheers, my mate. My comrade. The man who fights beside me! My fellow artist.

PPSNice penname.

really interesting idea... I like it

Thanks for the overly generous reviews: they were much appreciated. To respond to some of your questions/comments... I am currently adding a "bio" to my profile section at your request. And out of the last 15 or so poems I have written, I think one has a name. I rarely name them, though it's not usually a conscious decision. Mostly I just concentrate more on fiction than poetry. Now, in review of your poem, I think you have substance, which is more than I can say of most poetry I read. I commend you for writing about an idea that can hold my attention for its entire length (not intending to sound pretentious, just that I lose interest in poetry quite easily). However, I think you'd be better served if you abandoned the rhyme scheme. I personally don't generally rhyme, and I think it takes away from your overall intent. But overall, I think it's nicely put together, especially if you are truly the age you claim on your "bio." Hopefully we can continue our discussions/critiques in the future.

So much emotions. I like it.

Very deep...good job. Great poem! On a side note, I don't like the new rating system either.

Wow. Haven't read something this... fufilling in a long time. Wonderful, wonderful job on this. Just brilliant. Brava.